The Veil

The veil of darkness descended

Wisp of clouds at first.

Night would fall

Nightmares turn out. 

It couldn’t, it wouldn't. 

Final shards of light 

The evening sky, 

Mantle of mourning 

Now it’s covering

Clambering swiftly

The backdrop was set 

Darkness to seal the world

Heart abandoned 

An empty void; nothing

 How could this be? 

Feebleness the weight

Vulnerable, full of shame, 

Remorse and lament

Thoughts irresolute

Stabbing of dread and woe

Manner seized  

Foreign and cold

Distant from light

Still heart beat 

Breathlessly restive 

 

Torment holds firm 

Cannot escape, 

Cannot get out

Prisoner of the milieu

Reviews

[sammie bagley]

any lovely poem thanks for sharing your creative writting

[r. f. jordan]

i appreciate the brevity to stanza and line, as if the brevity itself is but a "veil" to a longer thematic unwinding. thank you for sharing your talent on this site.

[Kyle]

Well done. I like your word usage. You certainly know how to create a mood....

[Distant horizons]

Beautifully written. the theme of escape runs strongly through this piece, in a wonderful flow and use of language.

[Rusty]

Breathlessly restive... and beautifully written.

[Whiskurz]

You are a talented writer....I enjoyed this.....Whisk