No body understands

Nobody understands.

I hide my marks behind a smile,

But deep down I’m empty,

It’s a deep dark hole I can’t fill

 

Sometimes I wish I could call out,

Call out the ground to open and swallow me,

Or even reach down my throat,

Reach down my throat and rip my heart out

 

Nobody understands.

We both smile of course,

Only wish my smile was as legit as yours,

Instead it’s a mask I put on to cover the sadness

 

Sometimes I wish I could call out,

Call out a lightning to strike me down

Because now I’m just a vessel

Happiness is no more.

 

Nobody understands.

 I’m slowly fading away.

Bit by bit drifting away.

But nobody understands.

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

wow, you've a good grammar and good points once again... this is great,
Low-lee I can relate to you when you said nobody understands... but not all of course... There are people who understands you but they're quite nonexistent because they wont reveal their presence to you but good write anyway...
I'm looking forward to more of your writing (:

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

keep rocking

[hussien]

interesting

[meister]

Sm ppl do understand

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

I liked this poem :)

[BIIKAY]

awww...completely depressing!!! which is fine because alot of my work is as well.it is very awsome though!!!

[Anonymous Girl]

Its awesome. The sadness in it will nearly make you cry. Loved it.

[Tsukin Archangel]

omg i love this poem its incredibly dark just how i like it and i can relate to it good job insta fav 100/100

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

click clack boom u rock

[Tsukin Archangel]

lol thanks is the u rock just a thing u do? lol

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

I like this poem but my favorite stands >:D

I like how it flowed very nice and seem to still be catchy without rhyme. A really sad poem but it's good how you manage to form your ideas into a solid poetic foundation. :D

Hahaha... now I'm reading it again while in the middle of reviewing it X3 This poem is personally attractive to me as I can relate :)

Call out a lightning to strike me down= (I don't know why but it doesn't sound as good) you can try and removing the a :)

Sorry for my obsession with the little things

Good poem, please keep writing :)

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

sometimes i just close my eyes and put whatever i see on paper.happy that you like it, it means a lot to hear that from a real writter.

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

Everyone's a real writer and you my friend are one of the great ones :) I find that ability of yours amusing, as I can't do that myself without feeling that something's missing

[Irvette Dauphine]

the poem is sorrowful and this poem is flow, even i don't need to read it completely, don't know why..
like this poem, this is great :)

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

thnx u rock

[Sami Khalil]

Deep sorrowful poem but reflects an outstanding talent of portraying the feelings...

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

i jst put what i feel on the paper