shades of a blind man

I have been here for a while now

i know things 

i heard things

but i can't Imagine  or picture the world now

I like how my shades hides me from what i have never seen before.

call it insanity, but i conclude, not knowing is the best resort for my thoughts

like the saying goes, what you don't know wont hurt you.

my shades hides me from this cruel world

i can hear cries ,but its not that bad without tears.

i can hear screams but its not that bad without blood

also lies i can hear , but its not that bad without the deceive on your face.

my shades are my world 

where everything never grows old

i am safe here 

too bad it cant hide my fears

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

I should be capitalized... cant-can't, Imagen-imagine
just some few corrections... This is an incredible, expressive poem... Your shades is your world you don't want to be hurt so you protected yourself by covering your eyes... Sometimes I feel that way... I want the ground to eat me or I want to be invisible so no one can hurt me... But it's life anyway... you live with the pain and everything... Because that's what make up a person without it you can't say that you are complete... anyway, it's okay if you don't want to correct the grammar... A famous poet known 'E.E. Cummings' didn't mind his grammar because in that way he can express himself more...
Good write, keep writing ! (:

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

wow i feel like you were here with me when i wrote that poem because you describe the same feelings that i had, i will fix the grammar

[Rhianne Ney]

Okay... I don't want to correct it as much as possible unless you need it (;

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

i need it... this is my first poem so i guess it is more like a navigator it is going to point me in a right direction

[Rhianne Ney]

I don't want to sound like I'm that strict about it... Take your time... and more importantly welcome to WC (:

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

thank you be sure to comment on my next piece

[Rhianne Ney]

Okay (:

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

with time i will improve

[BIIKAY]

def one of my favorites...AMAZING!!

[Anonymous Girl]

Oh my God... Its so sad and nice

[Chris]

Stanza 3 - "its" x 3 needs to be it's

The neat thing about writing is it is the AUTHORS' choice of words - not the readers. Anything I say of word choice is a personal opinion/perception - for the most point. However, sometimes a reader needs to question the Author about a meaning, "For YOU - "shades" refers to eyeglasses. sunglasses? OR is window blinds you can release to cover the windows of a room to prevent your seeing out or others seeing in? OR are they 'ghosts' or spirits that can change your mind's perceptions of your surroundings?"

If "shades" are glasses then all of the "hides" needs to be hide, and the "it" in the last line needs to be they. If "Shades" are a single window blind then all the "hides" AND that final "it" are ok. If "shades" are multiple window blinds then "hides" needs be hide and the it in the last line needs to be they.

You gain a stronger and more meaningful work by word order BUT it is the Author's right to choose what that order is.

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

it realy helps getting a second opinion thank you for the tips

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

Wow, this poem is so strong and amazing.
Remarkable work!
100/100

[Irvette Dauphine]

like it although there's some fault.. same like me :)
btw, this poem is good. keep writing...

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

with time i will improve

[Irvette Dauphine]

yep.. i know it.. so, just keep writing :)

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

Typos my dear can make it unattractive :( but as we are overseeing it I love the general thought of it overall. Isn't it true how cruel this world can be? When was paradise last seen?

I agree with you wholeheartedly that, yes, not knowing IS better :)

Please keep writing

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

thank you this is my first poem

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

It's good for your first one. You would enjoy reading this some time later in the future. :D

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

plz do comment on my next piece so that i know if i am improving.

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

I will I'll be waiting for it :)