The inner battle cry

My Insides on the outside

My pride is swallowed every time I speak in front of a crowd to only read what the book says and as I read all I see is the people bored,bieng rude, and not giving intrest in what I say. As i step of the stage the crowd gives a clap and inside I am beginning to become a wreck i run to the bathroom to keep people safe from what's inside . For what would they do f they saw all the hate inside boling over waiting to unlock its cage along with destruction and revenge by its side that if they surface I cannot get them back inside I would be gone until they went away or was done spreading terror in the faces of people , hurting everyone insight and when they ask my humble shell why I cannot speak for my emotions have taken over me I sit on the cold floor my eyes a water for when sadness try to come after my destructive moods fade and I cry a scream for sometimes it kills me inside I try to hold it down but I am killing myself to save all of you from the screams and inside of me I hope I succeed to keep the world safe

Reviews

[Writer *78*]

If you look at my poetry it's all spaced out I can't stress this enough. I'm trying to help you so please don't take any of this personal.

[Kamari's]

I don't take it personal I appreciate the constructive Criticism

[Writer *78*]

Alright then space it all out like the review before from here on out with every scene you write. I'm guaranteed you'll get a lot more readers which in turn equals a lot more reviews on your work.

[Vidya Bacchus]

We all hide behind masks.Faces of what we think the world would accept.You have penned this very well :)

[Kamari's]

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Savannah Bly]

Another great and relatable piece. What each of us hides from the world to protect those around us. Well done!

[Kamari's]

Well I thank you for your review and I am very pleased you saw what I was trying to say through the story

[Sami Khalil]

I like this a lot. A lot of things going on here. The ending was very positive. Thank you for sharing...:)..........

[Kamari's]

Thanks for the feedback I'm glad you liked it

[Sami Khalil]

I did. You are welcome...:)...................

[Matt Thomas]

Well first of all let me start by saying I hope this is just a write and not your true feelings my friend..LoL..One thing I must bring up is your poem is not necessarily a poem because its written like a short story..Lines and Stanzas make up a true poem, this can be confusing for readers especially with the complexity that most poets use in their words..You have words and sentences running into one another..I can see that you ooze of potential to be a great writer...Your definition is spot on and your words are more than inviting...Very Marshall Mathers like..Just don't let a child who plans on shooting up a highschool read it..Anyways..Like I said you have some very good potential and I think you can be a great writer you just have to find your comfort zone..Poetry? Short stories? I give this a 75 and I am a very straight shooter...80s are usually high for me..

[Kamari's]

Thank you for your review no this is not my true feeling just what it feels like when your under pressure and about to crack I can see were the Poem thing is a confusing aspect and i appreciate you pointing this out to me