Chapter one

Jane and Percillia were the best of friends and on the day of Janes eighteenth birthday she walked to Percillias house with grief on her shoulders. She stepped up the stone stairs to the beautiful mansion and soon was meet by the French doors where a maid greeted her "Jane how nice of you to come over Percillia is in the ballroom". Jane walked through the house across the white marble floors akin the grand hallway that held portraits of past relatives and china vases worth more than two bricks of solid gold. The hallway was meet by a chestnut frame that led into a ballroom decorated in white silk , silver walls that held stained chaple windows which meet the white oak floors that was only match by the crystal chandelier that hung above the center of the room it's beauty had always made Jane happy yet today nothing made her happy "Jane !" Jane turned to see Percillia walk toward her and as she hugged her Jane began to whimper sending tears down her china doll like features that made the chestnut curls on her face get damp , Percillia looked at her friends big pale brown eyes "what's wrong?" Jane only weeper harder "my father is bring transferred to England and I have to go because my mom is making me I I don't they said they would not support my art career !" Jane became hysterical as Pericilla petted her matted hair even though Jane was ten inches taller Percillia stilled patted her head "Jane it's okay , and if you are worried about me I promise I will write you everyday and no one will replace you". Jane could only manage to talk through sobs"okay..I waant you to have my locket and I have yours and a picture of both of us and side and I need you to keep that promise we made two years agggo!" Percillia laughed "of course i will now let's have fun". Jane calmed down and the girls continued to go about their day until the next morning both were sobbing handing each other a gold and silver locket which held a picture of the two one the first day of that summer and then Jane was gone to England.

Reviews

[melissa]

Amazing book so far i can't wait to read more keep up the great work and keep them coming

[C. Rose]

chaple/chapel
it's/its (its beauty. its is possessive. it's is a contraction of it is)

Loving the detailed description.

Enter and tab. Please. It is so much easier visually to read if you break up a block of text into paragraphs.

In my head I've been saying Per-silly-ah. Is that right?

I'm having a hard time pinning down the time period. The topics of proposals and imposing mothers and level of description and lockets and mansions make me think Victorian/Jane Austin - but Jane talks about having an art career. A woman with a career would be ridiculous for that age - so maybe I was misinterpreting?

Enter and tab!

See you in the next chapter.

[Kamari's]

It is Per-cill-ia and no it is set now but the house is of Victorian area and the lockers are of family heirlooms' of that time period and the mother is a woman figure that was raised to this time values but forgets it is the 20th century and does not want to even recognize it so for the mother characters values I put them in a remote area where most of those things still existed

[Kamari's]

Lockets my bad my keyboard forgets to type things right