First off, I think you should put up another pics that fully displays your eyes, cause I have to tell you while I read this poem, I literally wanted to see those "...eyes that could light up the sun". Anyways, I think this is a good poem. It draws one into the intrinsic struggle of the poet and her "...longing for her voice to be heard".
That being said, I can tell you that I for one have heard your voice. And penning this down this is you expressing that part of your true being that may have seemed suppressed. All the best and I look forward to more of your works.
P.s. Welcome to writer's cafe.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much, for receiving the message and welcoming me. I appreciate the suggestions, i have .. read moreThank you so much, for receiving the message and welcoming me. I appreciate the suggestions, i have been thinking of uploading pictures for my poems when i get the time to.
I appreciate how beautiful, yet raw this was in capturing thoughts and feelings that invade all of our hearts and minds at some point in time. Good work!
First off, I think you should put up another pics that fully displays your eyes, cause I have to tell you while I read this poem, I literally wanted to see those "...eyes that could light up the sun". Anyways, I think this is a good poem. It draws one into the intrinsic struggle of the poet and her "...longing for her voice to be heard".
That being said, I can tell you that I for one have heard your voice. And penning this down this is you expressing that part of your true being that may have seemed suppressed. All the best and I look forward to more of your works.
P.s. Welcome to writer's cafe.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much, for receiving the message and welcoming me. I appreciate the suggestions, i have .. read moreThank you so much, for receiving the message and welcoming me. I appreciate the suggestions, i have been thinking of uploading pictures for my poems when i get the time to.
I loved this very much. Looking deep into yourself, there seems to be an intertwined, youthful soul that still retains such pure personalities. Everyone has that innocence within them, however, it's sad how most people will abandon their beautiful youth to become more like an adult. You've expressed how connected we truly are to our child selves. Nice job!