The mess of feelings

Feelings, why do we have to have the cursed things.

They kill us, break us down.

We go mad and lose control.

We cry over stupid little things.

Feelings hurt,

they sting.

 

 

Feelings are blessings, beautiful wonderful things! 

They make us alive and help us thrive!

We feel love and can enjoy the beauty

Of the heavens above!

Feelings are sweet 

and come in warm greets

Author's Note

So I made this poem in like 15 minutes, which is really fast and probably not very smart.....

And I wrote this at midnight so please excuse my mistakes XD

Thank you for reading!

PLEASE leave a review to help me out!

Once again, Thank you all

Reviews

[Richard Mueller]

The fact that the first stanza is bigger than the second stanza says a lot. The first one is the overwhelming feeling as it is the one that is easier to think than the second one as turmoil is a commonality in any one person's life. The contrast between them is great, but the similarity between them is greater. Great job. I think poetry is something you could get into.

[HipsterPrincess17]

Awwwww!! Thank you so much, that means a lot to me. I'm actually working on another poem right now! I just started it though, so it's going to be awhile before it's finished. :)

[Richard Mueller]

:) Okay! Sounds good. Can't wait to read it. P.S. I messaged you! Do get a chance to reply, darling... :)

[Amber Lily]

When I was reading the first half I was thinking a lot of things that you ended up writing in the second half. I agree that emotions sometimes are extremely useless, like when they make you feel like there isn't a point on continuing life. But they are part of what makes our world so unique and special. I really enjoyed this one :)

[HipsterPrincess17]

Thank you Amber!

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree. Without feelings and emotions. What would we be?
"Feelings are sweet
and come in warm greets"
I like the way you led to the good closing of the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[HipsterPrincess17]

Thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Dead]

You know what? This is so flipping true. One minute feelings are amazing and in the next they hurt. Well done.

[HipsterPrincess17]

Aww thank you!

[Dead]

You're very welcome :)

[Mara]

Wow this is great poem in only 15 minutes
i like how you wrote about both the positive and negative side to having feelings
Thank you for sharing!:)

[HipsterPrincess17]

I am glad you liked it!

Thank you for using your time to read my poem, that means a lot

Your friend
Lia :)

[MelissaAndres]

Very good! Feelings are kind of a glass half empty or a glass half full kind of thing. It's all in how you view what we were blessed or cursed with. Nice job!

[HipsterPrincess17]

Thank you Melissa! I am glad you like it!

[Inject Positivity]

Well the concept is beautiful and the poem is superb too....I think this shows how fast you can put the words from your mind on paper....Loved it....Thumbs up!!!!

[HipsterPrincess17]

Thank you!

[McBear]

This was beautiful. Just listen to the reviewers below c: It was very well written c:

[HipsterPrincess17]

Thank you so so very much!
I wasn't sure if this poem would be liked but it seems liked it worked out pretty well!

[HipsterPrincess17]

ugggg sorry if you couldn't understand that.^

:/

[McBear]

I understood. :) Very well done!

[Bear]

Critique: (They kill us, brake us down) break
(We go mad and loose control) lose

Review: Feelings really are a double-edged sword as you have expressed so well in your poem, and as to your author's note. You can't control where or when inspiration will hit you so sometimes getting it on paper before it slips away means writing as fast as your mind will let you. So good job on your speed at getting this on paper, it was a pleasure to read :~)

[HipsterPrincess17]

Thank you so much ^.^ That really means a lot coming from you! I hope to edit soon I am not very good with spelling as you can see. XD once again. THANK YOU!!!!

[Bear]

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[HipsterPrincess17]

I have tried to download it but it says I have to buy it first, its not free for me

[HipsterPrincess17]

I have tried to download it but it says I have to buy it first, its not free for me

[Bear]

let me see if I can kind another link, I got the app for free.

[Bear]

https://www.grammarly.com/

[Bear]

sign up and do everything up to the point of agreeing to pay.

[HipsterPrincess17]

Okay I'll try

[HipsterPrincess17]

Yay!! It worked. Thank you!

[Lavorther]

This sure is a great poem, considering you've only spend 15 minutes on it. I love how the first half is all negative, and then the second half is positive.

Although you wrote it at midnight, I only found one small mistake:
"They kill us, brake us down."
I think "brake" should be "break".

Other than that, I only have one suggestion:
"Feelings are sweet and
come in warm greets! "

I think this would flow better if you moved the "and" to the start of the next line, like this:
"Feelings are sweet
and come in warm greets!"

That might be something to consider, but just do whatever you feel fits best. It's your poem after all :)

[HipsterPrincess17]

Thank you very much! I will try to edit soon with the time I have.