I'd appreciate it if you would take a look at my poetry, and tell me if it is something that would interest this group. I need real critiques---not just praise, although if it is genuine, I welcome it of course. I get only a few reactions on the main board....they are pleasant, but I need more. Thanks.
It works very well. Poetry has often been describes as a rather poor relation in the broad spectum of the arts, visual and performing always seeming to take centre stage. I actually think however it the most all encompassing and in lyric form predates literacy in many ancient cultures.
Then again, I would think that, because I adore poetry.
we get the idea that poem imprints the memory..because what it captures will never be the same, it will change.
the music part works really well...
i like this but almost as two different poems...there is a variety of metaphors in the first part that actually don't connect to the metaphor in the second part which is carried all the way through that stanza...
i would make this two separate poems..
but the wording is quite nice...not big on the capitals to start each line...
jacob
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
It's supposed to feel like two poems - that's why the verses are numbered as such. Kind of like Vari.. read moreIt's supposed to feel like two poems - that's why the verses are numbered as such. Kind of like Variations in a piece of music - a repeated theme with a different angle to try to understand a different aspect of the topic. I did this more effectively later, on one of my other poems, "Four Variations on Afterthought."
11 Years Ago
yes, i did get the feeling of two poems, with the roman numerals...like a poem in two parts...
Hello! I'm a twenty-year-old university student who would love as much help and critiques on her writing as is humanly possible. I'm from Florida and enjoy reading, writing, hammocks, martial arts, an.. more..