A Slightly Alarming and Confusing Sense

Wrote this toward the end of my Junior year in high school. I was feeling somewhat down, but couldn't explain why. This poem is basically what I was feeling that afternoon.

Has anyone else ever felt this way?

Where you just want to crawl into the darkness and escape?

Has anyone ever felt this way?

Where, out of the blue, you begin to feel sadness and pain?

Has anyone ever felt like this?

Where you want no contact at all? Neither a hug nor kiss?

Has anyone ever felt like this?

Where elated moods are replaced with those of nonchalantness?

Has anyone ever felt this way?

Where you adorn a dark persona and keep everyone at bay?

Has anyone ever felt this way?

When you see your loved ones and smile, yet, you turn the other way?

Has anyone ever felt like this?

Like not doing anything?  Lazy and sluggish?

Has anyone ever felt like this?

When every chance of interaction you seek to dismiss?

Has anyone ever felt this way?

Like you only want silence?  But in it, you’re afraid to stay?

Has anyone ever felt this way?

When all you want to do is sleep?  Sleep all day?

Has anyone ever felt like this?

When your energy remains, yet feels strangely distant?

Has anyone ever felt like this?

Where, pleasurable times, you only half-way miss?

Has anyone ever felt this way?

Like giving in to the darkness that takes your smile away?

Has anyone ever felt this way?

Has anyone felt like I do today?

Author's Note

Constructive criticism, please. I'm always looking for ways to improve my writing. Thanks in advance. Jesus loves you <3

Reviews

[ScarletButterfly]

My gosh. I've felt like that before. That exact feeling you're talking about. I thought I was the only one. That feeling of distance. I think it might actually be a bit of depression but I'm not sure. I tend to get it if I've been strained emotionally recently and haven't had time to replenish. Spending a lot of time with a lot of people and going through a wide range of emotions can cause it for me. I got it a few times last year at college and every now and then in high school, too. I'd come home and stay in my room and want to rest and be left totally alone and not be touched at all.
The poem is really good. It speaks this feeling well and sounds like a cry for someone to say they understand what it is like.

[Shiika]

Thank you. When I first felt it, I thought I may have been the only person who experienced this. I was somewhat freaking out because it just happened randomly. Glad I'm not alone.

[ScarletButterfly]

You're welcome. It scared me in that way, too. It's good to not feel alone in it.

[Shiika]

Yea it is

[Whiterose]

This feels like a poetic discription of depression. (And you say my poems are depressing. lol) That said, it is a beautiful image of dark moods. The question of whether others feel the same way seems to draw in the audience and get them to relate to the speaker.

[Shiika]

Thanks. And yea most of my poems are dark in some way, or, at least, the ones I used to right used to be mostly dark. But thanks for the feedback. Still wanna know why I was feeling that way, though lol

[Whiterose]

Those feelings can randomly strike. Goodness knows I've had a couple of them.