Goodbye

This poem are thoughts to an abusive step father.

All these years,
Every single one of them,
You have managed to crush with precision,
Everytime you opened your mouth to me
It was either out of hatred or trying to regain your reputation,
And yet
You never let go,
Well we're letting go now,
I'm sorry to tell you that your hobby is no longer us,
This is no longer your home
But it's finally mine,
Only you could make four walls and a roof feel so cold,
No matter what colors we painted,
Booze seemed to leak from the ceiling,
So this is it,
I'm calling it quits,
My family is no longer your pedestal,
Her feelings are no longer your target practice,
So thank you for all you've done,
Whether good or bad,
Heart melting or heart crushing,
Thank you,
And goodbye,
I fear we will meet again very soon,
You will say this isn't over,
But it is,
It's been over for quite some time,
I'm sorry this had to go down like this but,
But you left us with no choice,
You've been with us for so long,
It only seems surreal that you're gone,
And yet,
My heart feels lighter,
And my eyes just a little bit brighter,
Thank you,
For teaching us what is right and wrong,
For breaking us so far down that we need eachother to get back up,
Thank you,
For all the smashed pictures,
For all the stupid stunts,
Thank you,
For tearing our family apart,
Because we will rebuild,
Without you,
So,
Thank you,
And goodbye,
I wish you good health,
But it's time for us to finally fly,
With all this said,
I leave you with only this,
You have given us much,
But taken much more,
So with satisfaction and victory in my voice,
With a slight smile on my lips,
And with a freedom I have not had in years,
I will say just one more word,
Goodbye.

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

This is very, very emotional, and rightfully so. Your imagery is very powerful, which is good and really helps to drive your message home.

I must say, though, that you really don't have to end every line with a comma. Many of them are unnecessary and it messes up your flow. You might want to rework that a little. Also there are parts that seem to drag on and just make the poem longer, so you may want to cut it down a little.

Nevertheless, good job.