Who do i believe

Its not good but i just had to let it out...im so confused

Who do i believe!

You two are so close

Yet yall tell me different stories

You say one thing

He says another

I don't know! 

I'm about to crack!

I can't handle this

These things yall tell me

There horrible things

They put me to tears

Some things just put me in shock

Make me think about who's telling the truth

These things are unbearable!

I can't stand hearing this stuff

I'm breaking down

I'm suffering

What do i do!

Reviews

[Angelheaded Hipster]

Hi Lexi...I can tell this was rushed...I see a lot of ways this can be tightened down, and slowed down just a tad. I read this way too fast, and I know you're doing it in your own voice, but ya'll seems to rub me wrong in the write.

If you would like me to show you how/where to tighten it, mail me with it, and Ill deconstruct it for you.

[Impulse]

I go with my gut when deciding who's right or wrong. I kinda have an intuition. It can be very stressful trying to take sides. Maybe it would be better if you became a bystander instead. Shows frustration and uncertainty. Nice job =]

[Wolfwind Words]

Simply on looking at the images and emotions thrown outward with your words. It looks as if you are talking about two people, who are of the same coin. Either head or tails, seems to add frustration and confusion. Perhaps if this were a penny or a nickle, a dime or a quarter may be better.

One of the hardest things in life is to know who others are and what their interests are towards the self.

If the sources of your frustration are making you feel as your words imply... I'd say it might be best to just find a good book and let them fade for a while. Give yourself time to think and find out where your lines in the sand are and just what you're willing to take from the source of frustration.

Great Ink! Makes one takes some long looks into their past and finds they can relate easily.

Aaron Wolfie Maycroft

[Bella-Marie]

I agree with all the previous reviews on it being a rushed poem...
I dissagree with all the previous reviews, because I loved the way it seemed to be rushed and angry and confused.
However, there were a few grammar problems. 'Y'all', not 'yall', and 'What do I do?', not 'what do i do!'.
Awesome work Lexi.

[Thorn]

I, too, can tell that it was rushed.
But the idea is good.

Aww, Lexi. I hope you get unconfused eventually!