Lines

Little red lines

All pretty and precise

Dotting my hips

And lining my ribs

Slow to fade

And quick to replace

They drip

Then dry

Then drip again

An endless cycle

Of a wet red

That adds 

To a collection

Of pretty white lines

That dot my hips

And line my ribs

Slow to appear

And never to fade

Reviews

[Onlyme]

This is a sad, emotional, heartfelt raw and a deep poem. That speaks to me about self-harm. Hating your body so much. That thinking marking it makes you feel better in return. As it releases the emotions that are trapped within your heart and soul. As well as the mind. And getting them out with direct action. But ultimately all your doing is marking your body and painful reminds of hurting and sad, and deep emotional distress.

[katie]

This subject matter is really sad, but I admire your way of taking that and turning it into an extraordinary piece of writing. This poem has amazing flow and I enjoy the way you use repetition to aid with the flow. I will definitely be watching out for more of you work. :) great job!

[Askew]

Thank you so much for liking this piece, it means a lot to me. This piece was hard for me to write, but ultimately I'm glad I did.

[Jade]

This is deep and kinda sad. very well written. I enjoyed this piece

[Chris Shaw]

These lines turned my mind to self harm. Cuts, neatly positioned. Dripping red, healing, turning into white scars. That may not be your intention, but that is where you took me Lexi.

Chris

[Askew]

That was exactly my intention. I wrote this just hours after I relapsed, and it had been so long that the sight of those lines really affected me.

[Chris Shaw]

I have seen it. Not done it, but I know the effect it had on me. At first I didn't know what the lines were, but I soon found out. Hope you are fully recovered.

Chris

[Askew]

They're interesting scars that so many people have, and they're a horrible enough sight to keep others from doing it. I'm working on getting better. Thank you for your support, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

It's hard to overcome, but it can be done. I hope you are getting professional support and understanding.

Chris

[Askew]

I am, and it is helping. I have a very good support system, I'm quite lucky in that regard.

[Chris Shaw]

Good to hear:)

[red.evangeline]

I thought the repetitive sound of the poem works really well with the cycle that is described in it. This is - I think - well worded, and it feels all too familiar.

[Askew]

I'm really grateful you appreciated my use of repetition and understood it for what it was, thank you

[Tate Morgan]

There is a magic to this and in ten years here I can’t remember ever saying that to someone

[Askew]

Coming from someone who has been here as long as ten years, that statement means a great deal. Thank you very much.

[Tate Morgan]

You are welcome I am Tate

[Askew]

Well I had gathered as much from your username. Nice to meet you Tate, as you already know, I am Lexi

[Tate Morgan]

Perhaps we shall be friends

[Askew]

I certainly hope so

[Einstein Noodle]

captivating read for me...have no idea what your "voice" is ...i think this one will have to reside in the mystery bin for me ;) it does hook and teases me to unravel what she wants ... your "voice" that is ... could be so many things
E.

[goldenscar__]

tamed beauty....glad i read this

[Perdition]

Well I must be reading this in another lunar light cause I see something otherwise...something physical. Chew this talent daily and continue to be fearless as I do hear that pages have some nutritional value as well, so live well off your books and talent and long term dreams as I am sure you will. This is smooth and as for my interpretation ..well I guess you can guess what is seen. Although there is a hint of something more...something personal and almost religious and deeper than what is relayed...though what is shared is enough in itself. As I said, I am sure you will live well..very smooth poem Askew. Thanks for sharing.