Forced Secrets

A poem written after a conversation over the phone with my boyfriend who completely ignored the fact that I relapsed today and instead ranted about how weed is ruining his life. He was high.

If asked a question

I will always give the truth.

I make no effort 

To hide my thoughts

From those curious enough

To properly inquire.

And yet

Few do.

Few care enough

And fewer are willing to listen.

And so I'm left

To stew

And wallow

In my own forced secrets.

I yearn to share

And hopefully ease the burden

That my thoughts have become.

Reviews

[Cherry]

The best part about believing in yourself is knowing you always have someone who believes in you.

I have a small note for you: in lines 15 and 16 you say the word "share" in both lines and I was thinking that if you maybe changed the "share" in line 16 to "ease" it would still convey the same meaning without being repetitive.

It's otherwise well written and an emotional poem that I enjoyed very much, thank you for sharing.

[Askew]

Thank you for noticing that mistake, and providing a solution :) I'll change it now

[Einstein Noodle]

your no frills language is a plus in this honest, vulnerable poem .. how lonely and difficult some of our secrets are to bear alone ... and a tragedy if once revealed .. our "friend" betrays the trust .. but that's another poem isn't it?! :) we are all so very human aren't we Lexi...

[Richard🖌]

There is scant little more valuable, Lexi, (I think) than having a good friend that respects enough to ask and will listen fully, without interruption, to one's answer.
Too, this is invaluable therapy to one needing a sincerely kind, caring, and patient ear and shoulder.

As a poetry teacher, I would like to share some helpful thoughts with you on this piece: Your title is strong and apt to the poem. The introduction "quote" line is redundant, in that "my high boyfriend" and ending with, "He was high." Suggest omitting the first "high". Your metaphor, syntax, emotional timbre, and line-breaks (the heart of Free Verse) are spot-on. Few will fail to admire a writer that uses correct grammar in whatever they compose and share with the world, as their quality is that by which their name will be recognized (if you would like more on this point, I will discuss it with you by message).

How frustrating and suppressing it must be to have much to offer; yet, none with whom to share it.
I really enjoy the creativity and originality of your writer's keen mind … thank you, Lexi, for sharing it in such an excellently meaningful and entertaining manner! ⁓ Richard

[Nolo Segundo]

Once I thought I was the only screwed-up person in the world--everyone else seemed to have their act together.That is a mirage--we're all, every human on earth, broken in one way or another, because we are more than animals and less than gods, and deep down, everyone feels that conflict within themselves. The funny thing is, once I understood this, I could not only open up to others (those I chose to) but they would often open up to me as well.

[Apurwa]

Extremely relevant, nicely written.

[Mistress Munxroe]

Often we fail to understand that we have to put ourselves first. When doing so we also have the right to surround ourselves with positive things. We don't have to maintain the toxicity around us. Great read!

[Hsnx]

i can completely relate to it..very nicely written ..it expresses me...my thoughts in some lines ...share your thought with those who care...who you know will be there for you ...even when you are broken...it ease your burden like you said ...as it did mine

[Wednesday morning]

Very relevant for today's world. Completely relate. Love it.

[Death's Poet]

I am so sorry that you had to write this. However, it's very powerful and beautifully written. You definitely have talent at writing. Please stay strong