White Hole

Just a concept I came up with

Steam punk dreams in a starship frame

Silent, like an intergalactic rain

Life is an octavarium ride

Floating through the great divide

 

Time is the nemesis

To the fractal’s stride

Behold the hypnotist

And his all seeing Eye

 

The witch comes forth around the bend

Holding her spider near its threads end

Don’t look too closely into the white hole

Or else you may not discover what is within your soul

Reviews

[Kitty]

short poem but very eloquently put. Thank you for sharing.

[Anthony M Smith Jr]

HaHo (Hello),
Kool poem! Reminds me of a tool song I listened to last night while making supper, kind of has a tune to the words. Life and Light
TT-TTO-NI-K
Elk

[Chaos Stone]

the first two verses are very strong, but the last one falls apart a bit at the end.
maybe revisit it sometime, especially with lines like 'to the fractal stride'

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good story in this short poem. I like the beginning. Words were positive and create a very good world. I like where you went with the tale. Last lines are my favorite.
"Don’t look too closely into the white hole
Or else you may not discover what is within your soul"
Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

This has many strong thoughts and lines in this poem. The last stanza really captures one's attention. This was done well and held my attention.