I wish I could help...

I want to kick his a*s

No you can’t

Put his face through glass

I’ll just laugh

 

I wish I could help you

I know

For what he’s put you through

It shows

 

If I were there he would be gone

You wouldn’t suffer anymore

I’d take your somewhere safe and warm

Where he couldn’t come to your door

 

I know you want to help

Your feelings are heartfelt

Right now let me handle this

I want to fix my crisis

 

Maybe someday we will find each other

And have a good time

We have a lot to do together

Things will be divine

Reviews

[Alz Alz]

Love this piece. I can tell that there are two people talking cause of the colors. This is great. Only one error: "I’d take your somewhere safe and warm" I think you'll be able to find it there, i don't have to tell you :P
99/100! hahaha. fix that boo-boo!

[Ecros Lathes]

I really like this I was once in this situation so I can relate.

[An owl on the moon]

The voices create such a longing for what could be, as they reflect on the pain of what is... This was a very intriguing write. Loved the flow and form!

[Norma M Sutton]

Interesting.

[Mitch*Dandy]

I absolutely love this!! This is amazing very creative and perfect! It is just a beautiful poem, love this!

[Chelsea.]

I liked this, it shows how people can feel what you do, and how their emotions kind of consume them.

[HorrorMaster]

great poem

[James Watts]

Have to admit, this was pretty good. Nice write.

[P.S I Love You]

Good Job! your work inspires me to make underful new stories :)

[MissWordSmith]

loved this. SO UNIQUE and just BRILLIANT! So fast, yet SO much was said!
I absolutely adore this!