I wish I could help...

I want to kick his a*s

No you can’t

Put his face through glass

I’ll just laugh

 

I wish I could help you

I know

For what he’s put you through

It shows

 

If I were there he would be gone

You wouldn’t suffer anymore

I’d take your somewhere safe and warm

Where he couldn’t come to your door

 

I know you want to help

Your feelings are heartfelt

Right now let me handle this

I want to fix my crisis

 

Maybe someday we will find each other

And have a good time

We have a lot to do together

Things will be divine

Reviews

[universe-explorer]

HAHAHA

The world does not want us, (but well need us, just that dont accept the fact that they need us)

[Enigma]

Wow. Nice. It a beautiful piece. About how a friends reaches out to help her/his friend through a crisis situation with the mere wanting of her to be happy.
Great write. Keep it up. :)
Loved the way you've used the colours.

[Misfit By Choice]

from the way i am interpreting it, i have felt this way before... i like the way you incorporated 2 different voices

[Scarlet Pulse]

Very nice. I like how you made it like a conversation with the different colors. That was pretty good. I liked it so much, I want to read more. I feel its missing something so maybe you can add a little more, if you can. Good job.

[Daniel Gardner]

I like the style

[thecoolone52]

i thought it was pretty good, the rhyme sceme seems to come and go a little........ which i think itd maybe be better if you decided to rhyme all the time or not rhyme at all.......... but in the end it was good nice job.

[Tara♥Undefined&h..]

perfect!!!!! i lovvveeddd it bunches. It was beautiful and heartfelt with lots of purpose!!

[Vin]

This was great :D well done!

-Beth

[E. A. Fielder]

I find it interesting how you incorporated two characters in one poem. well done!