His True Loves Eyes

Just a poem I wrote in the moment

Say what you will about the flickering flames

The symptoms are heartbeats and shames

I know the answer’s all too near

Yet here I stand with the dark mountaineer

 

Staring at my true loves eyes

Fading low, the time of your life

Reapering my soul was thy

Sitting in the cold, wet light

 

Whispering my soul away

Fainting at the freezing flame

Sickles fall around my mind

The sticks go down the death stream of life

Author's Note

I am aware this is not the most technically perfect poem but it felt right when I wrote it.

Reviews

[Frantzuu]

awesome write dude, short but powerful. ;D

[Tina Kline]

This is very mysterious and a bit sinister. Looking into your true loves eyes seems to be quite the event.

[Haifa]

This is great.

[Luna]

You would think that looking into your true loves eyes would be a good thing but this almost came off as something bad. Very interesting. Great write!

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Great images. It gave me chills.
The pen truly is mightier than the sword.
Well done!

[Katie Louise Hughes]

As long as you feel what you are writing, then you are doing a good job! Thanks :)

[ashley]

This is great! Good job! :D

[Tori]

That was very good :) It was sweet and had an interesting rhyme. But I really liked it overall :)

[HorrorMaster]

very sweet it will make a girl fall in love with you.

[Keevan]

it was pretty good. to me, the rythem was a little off, so i had kind of a little trouble reading it, but it was still a great poem.