Whispers

Just a poem I got from a little inspiration

Find me a word

Heed my call

Songs from a bird

Waiting on the wall

 

Can you hear me?

Can you not?

Please my angel

Don’t fear the dark

 

Nay the bee

Calm the trees

The Willow’s whisper

Your sweet kiss

 

Come to me

My dark eyed maiden

Play me you

Sweetened cadence

 

Take my hand

And follow me

While we rest

In the sea

Author's Note

I want you honest opinions

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought it was okay. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Havatara]

I liked how you had a slant rhyme going, and then you completely ruined it in the second and third stanzas. It would be way better with the rhyme pattern. It was still a lovely poem. Keep writing.

[Constance-Outspoken]

My honest opinion is that this is better than the average teenage sap-rhyme. However, that certainly doesn't mean its a masterpiece. Your rhyme is all over the place and there is no actual meter, which makes rhyming impossible. If you don't know anything about meter, please look it up on wikipedia, because rhyming poetry needs it to thrive. Sweet sentiments, though, and I'm sure whoever inspired it should like it.

[Halkhend]

good job I enjoyed reading it

[Chelsea.]

nice job

[Manda]

this was good. i really liked it a lot!

[Ecros Lathes]

I like the imagrery and the way it puts you right where you want the reader I love it keep on going. :)

[Eidolon Michael]

Pretty cool. I like the imagery

[NoAirToBreatheXSuffocat..]

wonderful, good job!

[Missing Part]

amazing good job :)