Sway

Just a way for me to express life lately

Study, study study

Oh how my mind goes

Forgetting everything

About life’s flow

 

Why must we “hit the books” so much?

Does it not hurt enough?

I just want to sway

In the wind’s every winding way

Author's Note

Tell me what you think

Reviews

[Norma M Sutton]

Very nice. I think we all need to relearn to sway.

[BlackRose]

i love the last two lines. Good comparison with just wanting to escape everyday life. Sway into the wind and forget about it. Good piece.

[Titan]

I agree with a fellow reviewer about changing "every" to "ever." I like the message, and I agree. Not only does one need a break once in a while from school or work, but from life itself.

[Coyote Poetry]

I still take classes and must keep learning at 51 years old. Secret is to find a place of peace. I like my writing and reading. My escape from the crazy world. I like the last lines. When I was young I would suicide board the ocean and free climb. Two quiet places for a wild and crazy heart. A excellent poem. You made me think.
Coyote

[JenLyn]

I like this a lot and can totally relate, school can be overwhelming sometimes and all you want to do is get away from it all. My favorite lines were "Does it not hurt enough? I just want to sway in the wind's every winding way." One more thing maybe you want to change "wind's every winding way." to "wind's EVER winding way." But that's up to you just though I'd point it out. Overall nice write, short and sweet. Keep it up. :)

[Jacqueline Lopez]

HEY, I LIKE THIS ONE, BECAUSE I ALSO JUST WANT TO SWAY IN THE WIND'S EVERY WINDING WAY. BEAUTIFUL.

[Frantzuu]

Great flow, the first stanza catches my attention with the repetition of study, it shows you how important but at the same time how stressful it can be. Great write. !!!

[Aimee Mahathy]

I like this. It's a thought that I'm sure most everyone has thought before. Such a desire to leave the work of study and just run off into the forest, to learn more from nature. :]
The last two lines were my favourites, a very distinguished contrast with the first two lines of that stanza.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked it. It was good. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Thomas Fleet]

It's a good poem, well written and everything.
I like the structue and the occasional rhyme thrown in,
but I have a question regarding the last line.
Shouldn't it be 'ever' winding way? If not, I apologize.
It just seems like it'd fit better.
Thanks for sharing! Keep writing.