Free Falling

Free Falling

 

Haul me down

No pause

No stopping

Just free falling.

 

Going down towards the unknown

Where angels fear to tread

And devils lurk in the shadows

Towards a past so dreadful, so grim.

 

I wish I was lighter

Let air resistance keep me floating

Let physics play its role on me

But I’m just too outwardly

Too…alien.

 

Is this life?

Free falling, never stopping?

Is this the way to live?

Is death really the end of it all,

Or is there something more to it?

Something worse, something more frightening.

 

 

 

Author's Note

I know it's bad...any way to improve?

Reviews

[Pax]

its a great start for a insightful life you'll have... i never thought life can be a free falling, perhaps most of the time , often times it isn't...

for example in terms of love, you free fall and chances are someone will catch you or not...

in a way perhaps free falling is almost like keep moving on/keep moving forward, only a few moments pause for a break but never a full stop...

death, its frightening indeed... and i also think there is more to it than its the end...

great piece my friend....

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thanks so much dear Paxy....it's always wonderful to hear your thoughts:-):-):-D.

[Pax]

hey you, it's been awhile... good to see you and read from you... and your most welcome :)

[Carlton Rolle]

a note about your authors note... it's not a.bad piece at all. the concept of the poem can really stay open-sourceended so that the reader had interchanges to connect with the piece. feeling alien can fall into the realms of lots of experiences. I like that. Thanks.

[Dominique Lambright]

"Let air resistance keep me floating"

I think personifying air would add a little more to the effect of the second stanza, so:

"Let air's resistance keep me floating"

everything else is good to me :) nice work

[KeeD]

Never think your work is bad, I respect the idea that you want to improve, we all do but by no means is your writing bad. This poem speaks to me more like lyrics to a song of break through. It's not depressing like how most people would imagine the concept of falling down from something, in life to be.. it's more like you're questioning the journey of getting up, what's next perhaps? I liked this, bunches n bunches.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Whoo thanks..that's awesome to hear. Thanks bunches n bunches:-D.

[Leigh]

I can imagine a body hurtling towards Earth and get imaginings from your imagery so the words have done their job, no improvements required.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thanks Leigh:-):-):-D.

[UnnamedPoet]

I love this one. Very very good. It is so deep and emotional!

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thank you so much:-):-):-D.

[Rebecca Buller]

I thought it was good. It was simple and from the heart. When writing is done from the heart, it can only be a masterpiece. I was also drawn to it because Tom Petty has a song with the same title:)

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thank you so much Rebecca. Ill check out the song:-):-):-D.

[Rebecca Buller]

It's a good one:) :)

[prashant harsh]

great love as m engineering student :)

[Nick.B]

What's bad? Life? Sure it is. Free falling? Maybe, but the poem is quite good, showed the ups and downs, well mostly the down of this pathetic life of ours....great job

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thank you so much for all your reviews Nick. Ill get back to your work as soon as possible:-):-):-D.

[Anna a. S.M.]

"Let physics play its role on me"
I love the style of this poem :)

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thanks so much Anna:-):-):-D.