Broken

Broken

 

How can looks be so deceiving?

Words so misleading?

How could I be drawn to the devil,

With a force so strong,

A passion so intense

And a love so true?

 

How could you do that?

Now that I know what you are

I wonder,

Are you even human?

Or are you the devil in an angel’s disguise?

 

He was everything I ever wanted

He was all that I needed to get me through the day

I made him my hero

And I depended on him like a little child

For he was my fuel, my only source of energy

He was everything I ever asked for.

 

But that was till his canines came out,

And his eyes became red

Bloodshot and scary

That was until I got to know the truth

Then the words started to disappear

And the sounds got fainter

And everything became blurry.

 

You gave me everything

And then you took it all away

You took away the ground on which I stood

You took away everything that I believed in

You turned your backs on your own words

You are a hypocrite

And I’m just broken.

Author's Note

Something I wrote about being heartbroken and deceived. what do you think?:):):)

Reviews

[Andy~]

This is an amazing poem, I must say. I find it interesting because it was written in a way that made me feel that this poem came from your heart. You were speaking about an experience, and you were able to do so in an artistic and creative way through poetry.
Keep up the good work, and I do urge you to keep writing - this poem is one of the best poems I've read so far in here!
~Andy

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Oh wow thanks so much for that inspiring review Andy. It really means a lot to me.:-):-):-D.

[Leigh]

I think its very song like and for some reason i found myself reading at a pace, like a song, with rhythm, although this was lost a bit towards the end. I think it was written with emotion and so you have put your feelings down expressively.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thanks so much Leigh:-):-):-D.

[Traci]

This is definitely a poem many can relate to, unfortunately. These lines stood out to me the most.

"You gave me everything
And then you took it all away
You took away the ground on which I stood
You took away everything that I believed in"

Very well written, full of emotion. As a reader I could not only read your words, but feel them, and that is great writing! Looking forward to reading more of your work :)

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thank you so much for your review:-):-):-D.

[Irene]

the fact that when reading this it made me think of all the times i've been decieved means that this is very well written

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Wow. Thanks so much for the review:-):-):-D.

[Nick.B]

Touching piece, dark and raw, maybe with a taste of revenge it could've gone even better, but still well done, love it

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thanks so much Nick:-):-):-D.

[Anna a. S.M.]

Oh god, I have to calm down now... This was so touching and it reminded me of something ... and someone.
Wonderful work! :) and so heart-wrenching and moving.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thank you so much...it really means a lot:-):-):-D.

[Anna a. S.M.]

Oh no problem :) I absolutely love such poems although they are heart-wrenching. But you know when your poems touch people they are good ^^

[Poussiere D'Ange]

That's what i always want my writing to do. Its the ultimate aim of a writer. Im really glad you felt that way:-):-):-D.

[s y e]

OMG! This was so touching! :( I guess sometimes there are some 'signs' that we miss because we are so in love.. We try to brush it off saying maybe it's a work problem or something else....

"You gave me everything
And then you took it all away"

I loved these lines, they were so heart wrenching.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Thank you so much Sye:-):-):-D.

[Invisible]

people are like that sometimes, seeming so sweet and charming, but inside they're corrupt and dark, and slowly it begins to show, but you don't notice cause you're so in love, and you figure "it's just a perk" or "maybe they're just having a bad day". in fact this might be the case sometimes, but usually it's something to pay close attention to, not something to ignore. as they say "better to be safe than sorry"

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Well yeah. Sometimes we are too blinded. Thanks for reading and reviewing:-):-):-D.

[Invisible]

yep

[Rebecca Buller]

"You gave me everything
And then you took it all away
You took away the ground on which I stood
You took away everything that I believed in"

Heartbreaking, heart wrenching, and incredibly moving. A very nice piece of writing.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

thank you so much Rebecca...it means a lot:):):D.

[Rebecca Buller]

You're very welcome:-) :-)