Vowels

This is a song. And I guess that's why it doesn't work as poem. It'll be up on our myspace soon :) www.myspace.com/howtostaypretty

break out and talk slow

you don't know what you're missing

see the backroads seem much safer

but your rainbow shoes won't save you

this time.

the fast things like the raindrops

watch them but you're wasting

the time left to discover

the future left inside you

 

i saw you looking

at the stars one night

and wondered what you're thinking

was it just me?

who thought that you were stuck?

 

Reviews

[Collect-Eye]

I've noticed that about your writing..it has a pretty powerful structure to hold a vocal rhythm.