september's sunday

you know

its september's sunday.

listening dreaming

confident voice,

confident smile.

perfecting that content laugh,

perfecting those so-real dreams.

planning future exploits

escaping future exploits.

THIS is fresh,

new way of thinking,

everyday.

this is what we've been looking for

so long we've searched.

and why?

it's.

right.

here.

i'm not alone,

everything's perfect,

and everything's fine.

i

don't

need

that

touch.

i don't need those explicit thoughts

anymore.

 

it's september

it's meant to be raining.

it's meant to be grey.

the sun is shining

and how i'll remember

sepentember's sunday

unlike any other.

a contradiction to the rest

a contradiction to the first.

here.

Reviews

[C K.]

kid you make me very very happy in a grand way :) It's like a really positive scrubs ending, or a really meaningful pop-punk song, or Elliott smith had he been raised well.
It doesn't fecking well sound the same at all! you berk!
Exploits worked pretty well. Ours won't, but the word worked well ^-^
Can we duet this? please? xxx

[An owl on the moon]

Brilliant and lyric, you capture the essence of light and life so vividly in the contradictions... Loved every letter, and every line!

Craig

[Michael Handel]

Getting better and better Jasmine Parker(did I spell your name right?)
No but seriously, this is really really good. You should weave this into a lyrical form and make a song...I'd probably explode to it...metaphorically speaking, of course.

[Sam Summers]

ooh, i like this. ive definately been in a similar midset, i think everyone has. i love the "future exploits" repetition.

as a sidenote, this is the first picture ive seen on here that i think really adds something to the poem. it captures the mood really well, especially of the last stanza.

[Lady Lazarus.]

a contradiction to the rest
a contradiction to the first.
here.

this blew me away....if my window was open we would be in a wizard of oz situation here this is so breathtaking....
weekends where hope you thought was lost is back and you can carry on walking forward bravelly and happily is what this makes me think of.
absolutelly enchanting...
and now to end with the best scrubs summing up....

"Oh and FYI, I happen to like the voiceovers on Grey's Anatomy. Except for when they're really vague and generic.
(And so in the end, I knew what Elliot said about the way things were had forever changed the way we all thought about them.)"