We Will Be

Wait

For me by the river side

 

Silent

As the gentle breeze blows by

 

I will come

For you when the time is right

 

And we will be

Always together forever

 

At last when I came

You were not to be found there

 

Where could you have gone to?

I knew that I told you right

 

But you did not wait for me

This is what we both wanted

 

What am I to do with out you?

I am lost out here alone

 

All I wanted was to be with you

But that will never be now

 

You said you’d be here. You said you would come

O, how I want you with me

 

A fool I was to feel anything for you

The river’s flooding my soul

 

The wrong you’ve done me can never be forgiven

The breeze is stinging my heart

 

You will feel the pain I feel when you meet someone new

Time has become my cancer

 

The guilt you feel will become your cancer and we will be

Never together again

Reviews

[Randall Andrews]

I am seeing a pattern in your writing. Do you need some more positive ideas or are all your poems thoughts of depression and sadness. Jake it's okay to have friends and be close to them. Do not shut out people from your life. I could see that the first lines of each stanza could be put with the next first line and the second line could be read separately with the second lines interesting thought no?

[TheFemininePad]

Wow that is a sad poem Leto. It's well written, but its also very depressing as well. I could feel the hurt of the person who wanted that person to wait for them. I would have used some commas though for this poem. That's the only suggestion that I would give to improve it.