The Soul of a Monster

What does your soul look like?

I look at myself in the mirror

And I stare into my eyes.

I venture into my soul

But it does not feel like mine.

I feel trapped in the soul of a monster,

Suddenly, time stops.

I watch as all my sins and good deads come at me one by one.

It's easy to see the reason why I have never won.

How could a sinner like me be loved?

There is only one right answer.

I close my eyes and the light begins to fade.

I feel alone, but I know I am not.

I reach my hand out,

Trying to grasp reality.

It seems so far away

Even though it is everywhere.

Author's Note

This was the first thing I ever wrote. I got into writing after some friends of mine said it was good.

Reviews

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Your talent is impeccable. You are quite a very insightful and skilled writer for one so young, it is astonishing, really. You're what I like to call a soul searcher, writing from the truest depths of your heart and meaning every word. There are some who write for recognition, then there are those who write to relieve themselves of a pain they have, I believe you to be the latter.

Well done! As always, I am astounded by your writing and I am glad I took the time to delve into it and see what it was like.

[Adesanya Yewande]

this is amazing,if this is your first write up then you are a natural talented writer,i love your choice of words ....keep it up, full rating

[Peyton Light]

Thanks :) That means a lot to me since this was my first writing :)

[Leo]

Quite deep for a 15 y.o I must admit..nicely expressed but at your age you should have a more positive outlook..

[Peyton Light]

What? These aren't my actually feelings. I'm happy with my life. I have a positive outlook on many things. I write these to try and understand and connect with the feelings of others who may be depressed.

[Gaia Octavia]

Well, your friend wasn't just being nice. I like this piece and it captures how we are our own harshest critics. Well done.

[Peyton Light]

Thanks. I always wished this one got more popularity. It has personal meaning to me.

[Gaia Octavia]

That always seems to be the case doesn't it? The pieces that mean the most to us drop through the cracks ☺