Alone

A short poem I wrote a few months ago.

What is it like to be all alone?

To be in a place where it always snows.

When all around you the cold wind blows,

And you trek on, to the deep unknown.

What is it like to be by yourself?

To be put away like a toy on a shelf.

To sit there and wait for someone else,

Cursed never to leave that destitute well.

What is it like to live every day,

Knowing that no matter what you say,

You cannot run from the things that you’ve done,

They will always be there, they never go away.

It’s so hard to live life all alone in the dark,

But you know that the past has left its deep mark.

All you want is to start over again,

But all you can do is wait ‘til the end.

Author's Note

Does this come off as clear to read, or do you find that the poem doesn't flow together in the right way? Please let me know :)

Reviews

[Shannon]

A mutual friend on wc sent me here.

I feel as though this poem describes different ways, we are human being end up isolated. The second stanza feels like a plea. The final one, resignation. But thst third one feels a little defiant. I think this person has strength yet.

[Resa]

A beautifully written piece!
It flows perfectly.
Sometimes I read over my work to much, I always end up thinking it doesn’t flow.
Don’t worry, if someone knows how to read poetry, they get our flow :)
Your poem also hit home for me personally.
Nice job:)

[Abigail]

Great flow. It entails what it is like to be human.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Haunting with real pain and
what it takes to endure...

[emipoemi]

Love the flow of this! And find it quite relatable. Well done!

[rowan.taylorrr]

flow is amazing. but i love the piece itself, it's so raw and shows so much emotion. i love the words you chose, great work

[Jennie Baron]

I suggest changing to a different font that is easier to read. The poem does flow well with the first four stanzas asking questions and the last answering them, so to speak. I like the imagery of the cold and snow. (I once wrote a poem using fog as a simile for loneliness.) Very nice work.

[apennylate]

Flows impeccably, syllable count and breath-meter... Is quite on-point... Not to mention the stunning imagery of dark embroilment... Only thing that does not flow with me... Is the detracting font style... However, I am NOT a stickler on stylistic choice... Just personally not the easiest for my eyes... I only mention because you asked for criticism so nicely... Very well penned...

[Peyton Light]

Thank you :) I personally love this font and use it for all of my poems. And I still think this is my best :)

[apennylate]

Then there you have it... I hate being critiqued for style, myself... So... Keep doing whatever the hell you want, haha... Font was the only detraction from flow I could muster, since you asked so nicely... Keep kicking a*s! This was the bestest of best...!

[andrew mitchell]

I think the reviews speak for themselves as do the views, a good poem.

[Tabby Mac]

I like this piece and it's message. The emotion is there too. Could it be revised a little? Yeah, but I like it the way it is. I'm just now leaning to put spaces between a few sentences when I post this helps slow down the piece for the reader. That might help this piece...example put a space after

" and you trek on, to the deep unknown."
SPACE
"What is it like to be by yourself? ..."
Just a suggestion. Well penned.
Tabby

[Peyton Light]

Great suggestion :) Thank you for your input. And perhaps it could be revised a little, but I wrote this a long time ago. I don't want to change one word :)