atleast I got out of Hell

Hell's gate,

Will forever wait.

Becuse I will not return.

 

In my dreams,

I still hear their screams,

As they burned

 

I did what I had to do.

To get away from you.

That regret I will always bare.

 

The devil still hauntes me,

Even though I was set free.

He is always there.

 

 

 

 

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Author's Note

This poem is supose to mean that...if someone does wrong and their life feels like a liveing hell....and if that fix what they are doing wrong...it will always come back to haunt them in the future

Reviews

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This is very great. Good job

[Roe]

this is a amazing write

[Forevermore]

true, living example rite here

[Alex Vidmar]

I like this. Well done.

[rivers]

Hell is a hella fine line...Sometimes the boundaries are invisible...That past is always there but it's up to us to take it's power away in the here and now...Food for thought, yes?

[Angelic Surrender]

True. Deep message here. Good work.

[Davi Rodrigues]

This one is good, I really liked the rhyming pattern... I'd just pay a little more attention to rhythm, there are some lines that kind of break the music of the poem.
As for content, this poem seems much more mature than the one I revised the other day. It's good to see this kind of progress.

[jennifer little]

nice i liked it it really showes the expriesion made here good job keep up the good work

[Daniel]

You're not the only one in hell. Good poem. :)

[Blue Ivory]

Creative! Nice use of symbolism =)