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I didnt really know what to call this

 

I never ment to give it away.

Al I wanted was for you to saty.

It was a dream I now wish never came true.

I still can't beilive I was that close to you

You took the one things I wasen't ready to give.

Boy I dont even know how you live.

Everyday I have flashbacks of that night.

And everyday I relive that fright.

The feeling was all wrong,

But you were too strong,

And now my virginity is gone.......

Reviews

[CHRIS ANDES]

a typo in the second line the word "stay"
..all is said in one stanza very powerful
=]

[paradise]

Damn. Really huge poem. I think its a really great poem just because it expresses how so many girls feel fter feeling pressured into this, i really felt the emotion in thie piece. Job well done it was a very emotional kind of right and politcally correct. keep them cming

[The Winter Grey]

The emotion from this piece is palpable, real in a most terrifying way. I felt the title was perfectly appropriate, sometimes the pain and emotion runs so deep, they exist in a place where words are no longer enough. Assuming this really did happen to you, I'm sorry this poem had to be written. But it was written well.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Powerful. If this really happened to you, I'm sorry :( If it was up to me, I would name the poem somthing like "The Haunting Past". Great work!

[VannahBanana]

I go with Forevermore, daddy had better take 'im behind a woodshed and beat him dead.., I'm praying this wasn't a down to heart write, and that this didn't happen to you., I'll be praying for you if it did.. and if you ever wanna talk, I'll be here.

[Forevermore]

I hate when guys do girls like this, i dnt mess with that s**t and its a fast way to get his a*s kicked. but great write

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Of course this would haunt you, but I have to say. I did understand what you were talking about from the beginning. It's actually pretty obvious....but especially if it was like rape...that would be serious....thanks for sharing...

[Ice Girl]

Such sad poem... I loved it!

[SuicidePact.]

this poem is really sad and so so powerful, i liked how you didn't say exactly what you were talking about until the last line, my favorite line was probably: everyday i have flashbacks of that night.

this poem is about a painful thing that haunts you yes?

well thats exactly how I read it. I can only imagine how that must feel. I too know what it is like to feel so out of control, to want to do anything just to make someone stay.

Great poem keep up the good work

xx

S.P

[Roe]

Wow..... This is a very strong poem