Where the good soldier dies

I can still hear their screams in my head.

The shots fired.

The soldires dead.

Their faces will always be in my mind.

Never forgoten.

Always intwined.

I try to drink my pain away.

But it never helps.

It's here to stay.

And every time I close my eyes,

Im taken back to the place,

Where the good soldier dies.

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

I never know what to say about these things when civilians write them. They're slightly confusing to me. Probably because I have very vivid images in my head of horrific events that never seem match the piece. That isn't to say the poem is bad, it's just running against my memories. It's actually a nice little poem and I appreciate the thoughtfulness and work you put into creating it so thank you.

[Mr Dunne Poetry]

This is a touching piece of poetry. I seriously recommend that you check out Baby Ricochets work on this subject :)

[Lina Grey]

this is heartbreaking. though, after reading Baby Ricochet's review, I feel like this, like most civilian-PTSD-writings, is more of symbolic about the sacrifice and the consequences than about actually having PTSD. that sort of write could only come from experience. having said that, this is still a powerful poem. great job.

[Country Girl]

This is really good, I like it very much. Great flow in words too.!!(:

[Krista Weiss]

Awww really sad :( Really great poem though!!

[Keith LaFountaine]

Great job! Lots of emotion and a great ending line. This is definitely something that a lot of people can relate to.

Just a few spelling & grammar fixes:

"soldires" should be "soldiers"
"intwined" should be "entwined"
"forgoten" should be "forgotten"
"Im" should be "I'm"

The grammar didn't take away from the poem at all though. You've got a powerful message here, and this is certainly a piece to be proud of :)

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks:) I will fix my mistakes as soon as I can:)

[s y e]

Wow, this is a really touching, heartfelt write. In a way, this kind of reminded of the poem 'The Soldier' by Rupert Brooke.

You got the emotion perfectly, it was great!

[Magnolia]

Harrowing :(