Hell Hole

Hell Hole

A Poem by Secret Lullaby

These thoughts in my head,

Make me wish I was dead.

The truth will never be found.

Especially when I'm six feet in the ground.

I'm too weak to even cry.

Damn I'm sick of this lie.

I'm just waiting on my turn,

For me to go to Hell and burn.

The demons in my mind,

Want me to do things that are not kind.

When I close my eyes I see,

These demons becoming free.

Soon they will have complet control.

And my soul will forever burn in the Hell Hole

© 2012 Secret Lullaby


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amazing.. wonderful.....I like this poem alot.. such emotion!! love it!
-Chesney Chey(:

Posted 12 Years Ago


Effing outstanding!!! Personal Hell and Demons in a very personal piece. I know all about the demons that control. I see them in the mirror.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Cool rhyme. Reads like a death metal song. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


We all have those demons inside us clawing to get out

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow I loved it! Great job

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love macabre language and little dark twists in poetry. How wonderful!

Posted 12 Years Ago


So incredible. And like Ms. Rivers, the second to last line should be complete, not complet. But other than that, simply amazing. 100/100

Posted 12 Years Ago


Secret Lullaby

12 Years Ago

Thanks(:
Wow, raw emotions with a poignant and emphatic twist. Quite an eye opener. But I love the message your conveying. It's a reflection of what our souls go through in life from time to time. Great write. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Oh, well this is very deep and scary! I love reading poetry that has a dark and deep meaning to it! But if your poem is true, then the best solution is to keep God's faith close to your heart and the demons will run away. Because God's power is the strongest in the whole entire universe. No demon can ever possibly compare to God. Trust me! I know how it feels to have bad thoughts stuck in your head. I've been there and done that. What I do is, release those thoughts with positive thoughst about my best friends or God. That usually works! You done a great job conveying your feelings of those demons stuck inside of your bad thoughts!

*The only mistake I noticed was "complet" should be*complete*.

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

12 Years Ago

Leslie, I did actually read every single word. No, what might be bad to you is more extremely bad to.. read more
Secret Lullaby

12 Years Ago

I was trying to get us to be friends again, i was trying to get us to understand eachother. I dont n.. read more
Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

12 Years Ago

Well, Leslie do you honestly think we will after all of this? The chances are slim now from everythi.. read more
I've been there. I really like this poem! This is very mature. Good job! ^_^

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on September 25, 2012
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It a new year and a new me. I have deleted my old information and have decided to start over. Life is full of ups and downs, disapointments, regrets, mistakes...but all these things make us who were a.. more..

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