Puppet Master

Like a puppet on a string.

He forced her to do many things.

Her actions were no longer her own.

And his control had only grown.

Strength is something she did lack.

Her love for him only held her back.

She just wanted to make him happy.

Even if he was treating her crappy.

But he kept pulling her strings tighter.

Making her want to be more of a fighter.

He was loving her all wrong!!

And she was tired of being pulled along.

So she cut those strings down,

Without even a frown.

Because now she can walk on her own.

And the puppet master was left all alone.

 

 

Reviews

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

ooh wonderful rythm!! I love the message of it! I think if you used a broader vocab it would be more elegant but I wouldnt worry to much its actually rly superb

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Not bad, though the transition from being controlled and cutting the ropes was a bit too fast in my opinion.

[afra]

great write ....well done

[Sabrina Marie]

This is realllllllly good! Great metaphor! So simple, yet so good. Keep it up (:

[Taylor Ann]

Wow, this piece was simply beautiful. The metaphor held a lot of meaning, and I can completely relate. Once I was a puppet, and he was my puppet master, but I broke the strings, and now I'm free to express myself and walk on my own.
I loved this piece. Keep it up!

[Crazy Cat Man]

ohhhh this can be a great metaphor for many things. an abusive father, or a bad boyfriend and the rhymes are just perfect doesnt seen forced like a lot of writing on this site. great job

[Rhea752]

WOW!!! O.o this is so powerful and has a great message!! well done i can't wait to read more of your amazing work!! :D