The Run Away

She walks alone.

To far from home.

She don't know where she's at.

And doesn't really care about that.

She only has one thing on her mind.

And thats to leave everything behind.

There is nothing left for her there.

So she left knowing that nobody would care.

She was tired of feeling unwanted.

It only made her feel haunted.

No one will know about the tears she cried.

Or how many secrets she has tried to hide

They will tell her story one day.

But only as the girl that ran away.

 

 

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I really like this and the rhyming has a great flow to it. I only spotted a few errors.
This is how they should be :)

*Too far from home
* No one will know about the tears she cried


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Secret Lullaby]

Thanks (: I will make those changes as soon as I can :D

[CHRIS ANDES]

so sad and I feel it
..the 'to' on the second line should be "too"
overallgreatwork
=]

[eatmills]

Well done. Your perceptions on this subject are quite right. You have written this really well, the flow, the words and the structure. I think though you should ask Santa for a better English Teacher ;)

[外人 (Gaiji..]

oh, honey !!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :(
Don't feel haunted, don't cry for others, none of these things are worth ! Just live your life and screw people

[afra]

wow ...i love this so much .... some times i also feel like running away

[Rhea752]

Ashley's right about everything. i loved the flow. but i also loved the story, the pain. Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!