A Tumult of Water

A Tumult of Water

A Poem by Leslie Philibert
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wet

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Water seeks a simple path, thoughtless
lines in the softer ground, a rushing
tumult of water and stones breaking
downwards and creating the face
of the drowning man, someone like this,
a to-be-ended, lost, a water smacker
liquid runner, a dancer failing to bend
his feet to the ground, an unholy wetness ,
a face forced into a liquid laugh, no answer,
disbelief at the end of an obscene ballet
failing to contradict the rain and the salt
and the waves stopless and stopless.

© 2012 Leslie Philibert


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Lovely. The work of a wordsmith. Vivid, yet cryptic, this piece evokes several possibilities with its symbolism, as good poetry should. Wonderful word choice. Complex in its simplicity. You have a new fan.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A very dramatic write on the water and its movement. Your skill and creativity sure shine in this one. One amazing write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like this. There is a creek near where I live and it is always moving and singing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


these are well-constructed couplets with approachable language and buoyant themes. the universal within the liquid, the clear compound within the sub-conscious, the surreal, and wet to the touch. this is a rivulet of poetry that speaks to origin as well as destination.

"failing to contradict the rain and the salt" even that which appears to contradict unifies. good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Like Frost, or modernism (specifically) to devalue the supernatural or
religious elements in search of new forms of expression.
"water seeks a simple path"
rusing down and creating an unholy wetness. This is good work.
thanks for sharing, hder.

Posted 12 Years Ago


What caught my attention is the way you wrote this. There was this eternal flow, like the flow of water, words just ending and beginning, and thoughts spilling, and that was simply beautiful. Also, how you compare the 'liquidity' with real life, of flexibility of a dancer and all other things, a link with the real world, and the, well, the overall flow was amazing. The ending was actually accentuating to the eternal flow that it is neverending by 'stopless and stopless'. I truly enjoyed reading, the feeling lingers.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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. "and the waves stopless and stopless" said the poet ... as i heard in awe ... wondering how fast the poet's heart must be beating when these words were said ... wondering about the pace of flow ... the emotion ... the journey ... the milestones ... "and the waves stopless and stopless" said the poet ... and i heard tumultuous poetry in awe ... truly stunning work, dear poet ...

Posted 12 Years Ago


And this is simply liquid beauty.

Posted 12 Years Ago


somehow words have become real to me again, i find wonder and magic in these words you've left here

thank you

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Leslie Philibert
Leslie Philibert

Bavaria, Germany



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