God and the Tanker

a beach

and

slow flows the esturaine bay, a b*****d river,

feathers of shot seagulls litter the tarred pebbles.

Skystink of hot rubber,grey waves salinate

the souvenirs of the not last war.

Giants strut the harbour,namesake cranes.

An ice wind makes my back embroynic, my head

tilted down, madonna and child.

A row of orange lights awake, and the gravel crunches

like the approaching of a noble house, with guarding lions.

The burnt horizon glows,

as a godless tanker sets for sea,

and... 

Reviews

[Elaenor Aisling]

Your poetry is deeply meaningful and beautifully written. It had such meaning in such few lines. You have truly mastered the craft.

[Mockingbird]

it's sad what tankers are doing to our waters and how they're killing the marine life by polluting it. it makes me so mad to think about it. great depiction of such sad events.

[Michael G.]

A very interesting read. Being an old seafarer, it made me wonder about the men on that godless tanker... and if their souls were safe.
I liked the structure.

[Audrey Howitt]

Beautifully written--vivid imagery--great word choice-

[Dayran]

It's like turning a novel to read a certain page, not knowing the contents of the previous page nor the one after. It leaves us wondering about where we came from and where we are going, while we view what's right in front of us. Nice write!

[...]

. there are many compelling images in this brilliant piece of writing ... for me, the best one is ...

"feathers of shot seagulls litter the tarred pebbles"

. it's absolutely heartbreaking and startlingly vivid ...

[Becky C Strukamp]

Beautifully written, I really enjoyed the last line, "as a godless tanker sets for sea, and...

I like the way you approached this by leading in with "and" and concluding with "and"

it's saying its never ending...wonderful piece of writing...

[WhiteWillow]

Lends a different spin to the phrase, "Life's a beach."

Love the open beginning and end. Says to me that Man has progressed industrially, and will continue to do so, even at the expense of Mother Earth.

Love the description and analogies. A beautiful piece.