Not About You

For W.

Not about the way

you spread your fingers across your mouth

playing shocked,then laughing.

Not even about your hair, straw-gold,

that moves across your forehard,

a mantle for northern paleness.

(Some lines will now be intentionally deleted,

due to the respect of anonymity).

Don`t talk about the code words,

the putting of rings beside soapy dishes,

eyes tired as days wind down.

Speak not of tea cups rattling,

as you carefully sort china,

steam rising for tea.

Forget the shutters falling with a bang,

the cold east wind thwarted,

light shining through curtains, almost candelic.

This is not about you,

just the slight perception of a dweller, a shadow,

my looking.

Reviews

[Emily B]

what an amazing portrait of her!

[AK]

Very nce poem! I loved the use of descriptive words and the fabulous imagery. Great write!

[Allen Smuckler]

I loved this, Leslie...Your superb use of language to define and describe your images was enticing. Each stanza could stand by itself and told a separate story. I could actually hear the laughter, the rattling and the banging...I could see the shock, the china and the curtains... I could touch the candelic light, the golden hair and the tired eyes.... I felt every word and every emotion Leslie. This was so beautifully written.
I loved the way you told us how, even though it was "Not About You," you still had to delete lines to protect his identity (I would have loved to read those)....So very creative and well done.
Great write Leslie
Keep 'em comin'
allen

[Eric Cox]

Very nice. Like the imagery, humorous line and overall piece. Nicely done.

[Octob3r Star]

That was really amazing. I'm like shocked, very awesome. Thanks for the write. :) Cheers.

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. oh, this is absolutely exquisite poetry ...
. amazingly beautifully written ...
. definitely one of my favourites by you ...