Empty as a Fool

as it says

wet, curved hills,

sleet behind my eyes,

watery moss

in unreal green;

all this sucks like love

at my heavy steps,

then the stolen voices

of playing children,

kites that text the sky;

all this part of a story,

a day empty as a fool

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just how this hits me...reminds me of an older man who never engaged in having a family....he sees the kids playing, knows what he could have had, but instead he opted for just making money in a career, no time for what could have been in his life...and he is as lonely as a kite by itself flying in a desolate wind.

j.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

all this part of a story,
a day empty as a fool

-- very interesting sentiments: sometimes perfection seems so boring because it is always expressed in the same manner

[Valentine]

Wasted life, wasted tears, in the heart...only fears. Valentine

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! sleet behind my eyes is brutal ..and the watery moss invites the death of me .. then one leaden foot after the other until i am taken by a horrible tragedy .. my life .. the word love becomes a torment in your poem ..i think "Empty as a Fool" is packed with between the line Sartre ... sheesh! ;) i feel a need to pack my head with sunflowers and daffodils to balance out the keel :))
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This left me feeling that the protagonist was out walking and although seeing these visual signals of life felt empty and devoid of purpose.
As always a masterpiece of words that evoke images and emotion Leslie

[Ken Simm.]

I love that final line in this essentially existensial poem. The atmosphere is palpable and yet gentle.