Goodbye

just a few lines

Alone in a crowded room

         she whispers through

         her sharp cat`s teeth..

Count the rest of your life

in days you do the same things.

Imagine a space in the air

where I will never be.    

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Harsh, and cutting -- the end of a relationship in a public setting.

[Coyote Song]

Very sad. Very sad. Yes the absence of a loved one. Oh, how it hurts and hurts and hurts. Even after time goes by, the hurt is still there. How do you really say goodbye. I hold this poem close.

[Tina Kline]

Impressive poem. This has quite the impact, an emotional impact.

[Valentine]

Having lost my husband, I can feel this write deeply. Valentine

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you do the same things, but without me....imagine your life that way...

because you have alienated me, as well as others.


well said...

j.

[V]

A thought evoking piece. I can identify with the lines "Count the rest of your life in days you do the same things". I have thought like this and about it very often, it leaves a sentiment of insignificance in me.