Tunnel

a tough week, here a few lines about how bad it can get

I thought I heard steps in the house, but

it was the black tunnel of my own heartblood,

a flood in old caves.

My eyes are full of smoke,

I am as empty as an old suitcase.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, yes...we hear the past and/or the future following us, or beckoning us. Like voices in a haunted house....the steps behind us, in front of us...and we are traveling with the thoughts...the heart pounding,
love the last line..."I am as empty as an old suitcase"---yes, we travel light, clothes-wise but even an empty suitcase is heavy when there is so much baggage we carry with us inside.

j.

[Leslie Philibert]

Sometimes I wake up at nights, disturbed and clogged with dreams, and feel this unease we all know, and feel like a dusty,unused suitcase..Thanks for the review, and my best wishes.

[Valentine]

I think we all have had days like this where nothing seems to go right and all one wants to do is get the day over with. Valentine

[Ruth]

This totally wrenched my senses...a most poignant piece Leslie, take care...

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review, I`m OK, but as you know we poets are unstable, difficult persons who live from emotions, and so are able to create...

[Coyote Song]

A fantastic chilling write. It's like a cold shadow is hovering near. A strong poem. I sure hope that weekend got a lot better.

[Tina Kline]

I can feel the darkness, fear and pain in this. There isn't much worse when you think you hear someone in the house when there shouldn't be, the heart pounds painfully and loud. There is the terror and feeling of helplessness. Great poem!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like how there are many dark symbols to express your feelings... makes many more metaphors to consider and visualize your feelings

[Terry O'Leary]

I hope there is light at the end of the tunnel!
Nice poem

[Leslie Philibert]

Dear Terry, thanks for looking at this, and my best wishes