The Third Person

how to avoid yourself..

Step aside, slightly,

                from a beach beside

                cold moving water.

A sighting in rain,

                hooked on a line,

                empty as a fallen bell,

                an open window, opaque..

If I am distant to myself,

                I am lost, aware

                of room, the soft crunch of shingle.

Steps of a known stranger, a shell.

  

Reviews

[Coyote Song]

yes, so many ways to avoid oneself. Don't look in a mirror. I think this is a fantastic write. lOve the imagery you sue. Perfect for what I think you were trying to say.

[Lyn Anderson]

Strong opening. Lonely and lost. You say a lot with few words. Nice to read you again.

[Tina Kline]

A great poem, love the imagery in this. Very well crafted.
I think we all spend our lives trying to avoid ourselves, trying to be someone we are not. But it never works, it only brings unhappiness until/if we learn to accept who we are. Pretty cool people.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i don't recognize me...i am a stranger in my own life...sometimes life seems to be easier to deal with if we distance ourselves from ourselves...the truth can hurt too much...we want to give it lighter shades...make it more indistinguishable...

an in depth write with insights into the self.

[V]

The images are vivid and read fantastic. It's calm and thoughtful. A pleasure to read.