Girl At A Bus Stop

Girl At A Bus Stop

A Poem by Leslie Philibert
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a poem I wrote quickly, that needs some work

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A white dress
full of winter cherries;
hair curled with frost.

A carried box
tied with string
and legends.

Maybe a modelled
sister,or a ghost
from a playground.

You turn to
circumnavigate
in all this road

and wonder that
this is as
a finger of snow in April.

The sky is hasty
with a flock of clouds,
broody, hanging -

The next day empty ;
just a shape without standing ;
colder. 

© 2015 Leslie Philibert


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The imagery in this little gem is outstanding. I'm so glad I stumbled upon this today. A delight to read.

Julie

Posted 9 Years Ago


Hi you have written it clearly and I can imagine her through your words and I don't think you need to work it more.
I liked it Leslie.

Posted 9 Years Ago


You may well have written 'Girl At A Bus Stop' quickly Mr. P but it is nevertheless quite delightful to read and then mull over. Not sure it needs much work, if any.......

Posted 9 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

9 Years Ago

Pleased you looked at this, and my thanks.
Neville

9 Years Ago

My pleasure
This struck me as the protagonist watching a girl alone who looked forlorn and trying to figure her out. Not sure why YOU get rejections when every poem is 100/100 to me!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

9 Years Ago

I write a lot, some of it works, some not, but there are are so many betters poets than I writing.
John Alexander McFadyen

9 Years Ago

No Leslie not many at all!
Master K-tops

9 Years Ago

I have to agree! Not many at all!
A very visual poem. I could see the girls standing there.
The imagery and descriptions you use are outstanding.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

9 Years Ago

I`m pleased you liked it, especially as you write so well.
that was very beautiful and the description was amazing. i loved the metaphor of "The next day empty"..
that was well done :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

9 Years Ago

Thanks, and my best wishes.
You had me at ...
"A white dress
full of winter cherries;
hair curled with frost."

Wow Leslie, this was beyond 'great'....loved it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

9 Years Ago

Pleased you liked this, thanks.
Helen Crutchett

9 Years Ago

You are welcome Leslie :)
Sometimes people pass by too quickly through our lives and we keep hoping to see them again, somewhere, sometime. Enjoyed very much.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words
this reminds me somewhat of one of my favorite movies..."a portrait of Jenny"---
is she a ghost? is she real?

i love the "sky is hasty/with a flock of clouds/ broody, hanging--"

the next day she is gone...and it is cold, and we wonder if she were ever there in the first place.

sometimes the ones that come out quickly do so for a reason...they work as they are.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Leslie Philibert

9 Years Ago

Hallo Jacob, you are always very kind, in contrast to the huge number of recjects I get when I send<.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

9 Years Ago

i am not just being kind, i really like your work...it is deep and filled with imagery that paints p.. read more

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Leslie Philibert

Bavaria, Germany



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