Rented Sky

a sad story,maybe

Star to let

to a cat-lover

and friend of

less perfect dahlias,

to putter-outers of

unwashed milk bottles,

to curtain shifters

and spectacle sinkers,

to all those gods

in Victoria`s long terraces

all waiting for

the flat upstairs.

Reviews

[Chrisanne]

This poem says so much in so few words...this is what poetry is all about. A lot of us could learn from you. This was a great read.

[Neville]

I am sure that this would hold it's own in any poetry competition. The title first caught my attention and then you played a blinder till the end.... Very good indeed in my book.... N

[Coyote Song]

This does have a sadness in it. A group of people just waiting for someone to die so they can have the flat themselves. Nicely done, impressive poem.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words, my best wishes.

[Coyote Song]

You are welcome.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I had the impression of a vagrant on the streets watching all the nuances of life around him when I read this. Another beautifully crafted work Leslie!

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks, and have a nice Easter break,my best wishes.

[Tina Kline]

Another outstanding poem, love the image you use in this poem.

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo Tina, thanks for the review,and my best wishes. I write a lot, some work, some don`t, I hoperead moreHallo Tina, thanks for the review,and my best wishes. I write a lot, some work, some don`t, I hope
this is one of the better ones !

[Tina Kline]

You are very welcome.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Yes, even settings and location can influence our moods. Implicitly insightful poem over here.

[Leslie Philibert]

My thanks and best wishes !

[Lyn Anderson]

From title to finish, another amazing write from your gifted pen. The grass is always greener, but with style.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review and the kind words,,,but I still have a lot of work to do, I am not where I want to be !

[Valentine]

It is funny how you can give a person the moon and he will want the stars. The upper flat for a better view or so they will feel safe opening their curtains. Kathie

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo Valentie, thanks for taking the time to look at my work, I send my best wishes !

[Valentine]

Best wishes to you too Leslie, have a great day. Kathie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that "flat upstairs"

we live as who we are...those unwashed milk bottles...but we are less than perfect for sure...just shifting the curtains to let or not let the light in on our lives...lives of just waiting for what comes next.

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo Jacob, thanks as always that you look at my work, I appreciate your patience, I write a lot, and not all is as good as it should be, thanks for your kind words.