Witch On The Horizon

a picture

Cut out of black paper

Japanese

Thrown before a sky

Of night milk;

Janitress of a

Lower house,

One toothed;

Point hatted;

Flying past a

Victorian curtain;

Two thirds storm,

One third dark.

Reviews

[Tina Kline]

I like this poem, very descriptive. I think you achieved what you wanted.

[Coyote Song]

Very visual, very well crafted poem. I think its impressive work.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Wow! This is unique. This piece seems like a juxtaposition between Western (witch folklore) and Eastern (poem format) cultures.

[Sami Khalil]

I really like your mental description of this Japanese picture. I take it you own one or you have seen it elsewhere. Or I take it as the mushroom cloud from the nuclear attacks on Japan...Excellent...:)....................

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This provoked images of an origami figure or paper lanterns. As always you produce an image or story from few words which is a fine skill. The line cut out of black paper immediately set the scene and drew me in Leslie.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review; this poem lacks progression, but I tried at least to get it well observed!