Finnish

this is a strange poem, I know, that nobody will read. I wanted to write something a bit unusual.

If this poem were in

Finnish, the pronouns

would have no gender ;

so

I love it,

its hair falls

its eyes are

opaque as dust

in a glass.

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

Very interesting. Love the unique and creative quality about this one. I do wonder where your brain formulated an intriguing idea such as this...or maybe I don't want to know :p Very well penned.

[Cory Barrett]

Surprising, and there something refreshing about the lack of gender in the writing.

[Emily B]

When you said no one would read, i had to come

[Leslie Philibert]

I tried something new here, the idea not bad, it needs ( I think ) some work !

[Emily B]

it was fresh and new and thought provoking, i was glad for the travel through here

[Lyn Anderson]

Beautiful. This is an amazing poem. Taking the gender out changes everything, doesn't it? It is always a pleasure to read your outstanding poetry.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review,and indeed gender shifts the perspective..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am taking 'it' to mean 'her' if I read this correctly Leslie? Trying new things is always worthwhile.
No matter you always write in a flowing, fluid form that leave one in wonder.

[Leslie Philibert]

I wanted to confuse, is it her, is it him ?.... this is about love, gender and grammar !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sounds like a challenge to put to fellow writers?

[rach]

Learning another language and the quirks of the way it works is fascinating and eye opening.
I enjoyed reading this a lot.

[Leslie Philibert]

an experiment, I know, does it work ? maybe..thanks for the review !

[rach]

I like it, I think it's a fun idea to play around with.