The Dead Bird In My Garden

as it is..

Shock,without motion you are a

Caricature of flight; a dry purse

Filled with small stones;bonesticks,

Misplaced.So now I must hide my

Hands in garden gloves, full of

Earthsweat and hardened by

Rain. And when I carry you on a

Spade it is a burial second-class.

When you move, question, is it the

Tremor of my own forearms ?, or are

You ready for flight, still full of air ?

Reviews

[Cryingkate]

Been there. Yes walking with it and wondering if I am moving it or if it is still alive.
Know what I like the undertone of thought going on here.
Having a funeral { being buried) and not just trashed then hopes of wondering if it is still breathing, shows compassion. And looks like a tough man trying not to show he cared either way but does indeed have a big heart.

[Briana O'Connor]

This has a very unique quality to it that rains beauty. The scenery withing the piece was described vividly. Thank you for sharing.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is wonderful, with great imagery.:)

[Tina Kline]

Nicely done and well written but a bit sad. I always feel sad when I come across dead birds, some do give the appearance they had been trying to take flight.

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo Tina, thanks for the kind words..it`s a kind of shock, somehow..

[Tina Kline]

You're welcome.

[Master K-tops]

I really like the way it begins with such words as "Carricature of flight". This is one of the most enjoyable poems I've read in a long time. Its beauty is found in its simplicity and brilliant artistry.I also enjoy the great imagery employed throughout the poem. My favourite is the ending part:

"When you move, question, is it the
Tremor of my own forearms ?, or are
You ready for flight, still full of air ?"

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo Master, thanks for the kind words, and best wishes...

[Zahra]

very well penned. thanks for sharing this wonderful write

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review, and my best regards..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Leslie you describe this so vividly in such well chosen metaphors and words. I recall having to do this twice in the past and this is just how it felt!

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks. John, for the kind words, I hope this is how it is...

[AYVID N]

This is very touching and sad. A dead creature in semblance of a flight it was born to take. Death is always so sad. You have great love for nature and its creatures...

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words, indeed a sad event,a small tragedy in this world of big ones..