Paradise

back to English..

Let me be an old man in Anatolia

Resting on a white plastic chair

Saintly in a starched white shirt,

Drinking tea from a glass that has

Curves like a woman, watching

Children and traffic, nodding at

Shadows, a friend of dust and

Thin cats, weightless like a moth

On running water, silent with the

Grace of years, half asleep.

Reviews

[Coyote Song]

....yes a very peaceful and relaxing scene your words paint. A very enjoyable read.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This made me picture many medeteranian scenes I have witnessed and the sense of serenity and simplicity such a slow paced life portrays. Dusty hot days just watching.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks as ever, John !

[Valentine]

Sounds heavenly, all but the starched white shirt, that might get sticky hot in the warmth. Nice one. Valentine

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review, and best wishes !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that would be paradise...an old man observing life, nodding...still able to assess...as long as I still have my wits about me and can sip that tea...I want to be around...

love the line "thin cats, weightless like a moth"

[Leslie Philibert]

When a poets of your quality writes this, then I am very pleased to read this !

[stars are far]

yes, that image is very beautiful, it makes someone feel the peace in the world other than the industrial life that he is facing everyday.. that is very well described writing, iloved it

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review..this is a kind of dream..

[stars are far]

always my pleausre dear :)

[Lauriegirl]

I absolutely love this piece..it shines with rays of beauty and lights up my heart..I can see the whole scenario and it is breathtaking

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words, I wanted to get a feeling of peace and tranquilty here...

[Rene Salinas]

And enchanting feeling here. Never been to Turkey if that's where I am been sent to with the writing. And it oozes age and acceptance, less of the fighting more of the taking in. Exhaling what is infront of him not so much as interfering more of the intervening with the senses. The following lines are intriguing becuase they talk about a state of coniousness that is present in the older ages. As deastiny half fullfilled and waiting for the next whatever that may be it would be indicative of a dream like conciousness.

Half asleep , very endearing feeling.

Thankyou Leslie.

[Leslie Philibert]

Probably Turkey is not like this any more, I just wanted to paint a picture of peace..
Thanks for the kind words !