A Murdered Girl Sleeps Next To The Motorway

a picture

Eyes shadowed from stars

The not-quite silence rests

On your bleached cheek;

Trees adorn your faint skin

The sun does what a sun does

And melts water from your face

A passing fox kisses your hand;

The moon lights or not ;

All this as the busy race

Under orphaned bridges, tearless 

You are lost for the wrong reasons

But safe under loam

Sleeping in the ground like a blues.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is so sad...and like Chris said "compelling"

i was a witness in a murder trial of a serial killer...had met the girl the night she was killed...

your last line really uneases me...when i met Joan Wetherall she was wearing an blue angora sweater, had a big blue stoned ring on her finger..and this reminded me of how she was left that night by the strip pits...but a serial killer i actually knew by sight...was a regular customer in the restaurant where i worked....this really takes me back...you capture it better than anyone i have seen....

"a passing fox kisses your hand/ the moon lights or not"

bravo!

[Coyote Song]

A very haunting and sad tale in your impressive poem.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words...

[Cryingkate]

Sleeping in the ground like a blues.? I'm not sure what that means, But i interpret it as "like a sad song"
That hits me like a sad song that haunts the mind and you can't let go.
The passing fox kisses your hand.. Love that line. Compassion from a wild animal a contrast from the busy race (mankind) that has abandoned the orphan from above on their busy highways and byways,tearless as they pass overhead knowing the orphaned and homeless are beneath and in need.
I like the way the poem is constructed each line does create the picture.

[Leslie Philibert]

Theres an old blues song that goes...
I would rather see you
Sleeping in the ground..read moreTheres an old blues song that goes...
I would rather see you
Sleeping in the ground..
and this ( for some reason) jumnped into the poem !

[Cryingkate]

Ah well it worked even though i didn't know, but your details add that extra layer.
Thanks..

[Shaquana Adams]

Lost for the wrong reasons... I really like this line. Nicely penned for such vivid and sad imagery.

-QuanaWana

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review, best wishes

[外人 (Gaiji..]

So sad ... and so well pictured ! Nice poem, my friend :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks, and I look forward to reading more from you soon, you are a master of translation !

[外人 (Gaijin)]

you're so kind =D

[Sami Khalil]

A sad picture indeed and deeply touching to the senses. Lost for the wrong reasons is so true and unfortunate. I feel our plight(s) is part of the wilderness in nature. A marvelous poem, sir...:)........

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review, and best wishes.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure sir...:)................