Time Lost

I wrote this very fast

So at some point
you start to notice the difference

that makes this single;
a sparrow on a fallen wall

the first change of glass
to drops of water

loam broken from under
in the garden`s warmer corner.

You start to hold the finite;
a coin minted and shaped,

held for the last time
then spent as your body;

the past like the hidden part
of an iceberg; lost in blue.

Reviews

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

At times the words leap onto the page, as a static discharge before the quill contacts the parchment. This piece reflects the realization; there are more hours behind than ahead. And yet you make it, by the wording, uniquely optimistic. As with a good novel, when we reach the end we are not sad, instead we are sated by the fullness of well crafted chapters.

[Zahra]

Intriguing and wisely crafted. Very nice

[Tina Kline]

Fantastic poem. Worth reading many times.
Once doe get the sense of 'something lost' when reading your
descriptions and imagery. Perhaps more than just time.

[Coyote Song]

A fantastic poem with wonderful imagery. It gave me a rather sad feeling.

[Frieda P]

You should write 'fast' more often, this is outstanding Leslie.

'You start to hold the finite;
a coin minted and shaped

Such is life in its peculiar nuances, you pen'd it so beautifully. Love that last stanza.

[stars are far]

This is amazingly done..your last two lines are my favorite..
I liked that idea..thanks for sharing :)

[Marie Anzalone]

I live in a beautiful place that only has two seasons- and the change for us is extremely abrupt. One day everythign is dust, the next, it is mud. We do not have the nuances of the cycles of 3 months each, slightly different form the rest. We don;t have the small observations that tell us a thaw is on its way, a new cycle has come. Only the very observant note subtle chnages in birdsong and vegetation shifts. It is not better, not worse... just different. And when I think of the things I miss most about the US- 4 seasons in the at times unforgiving northeast is certainly one of them. I ownder if that is why it feels so much, to me, like time has stopped in place when I am here, but speeds up to light intensity when i am in the US?

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review ; your words are subtle, well observed,the comment of someone who is a talented writer, this review itself as a piece of prose is excellent...

[Shaquana Adams]

held for the last time
then spent as your body;

the past like the hidden part
of an iceberg; lost in blue.

This is very beautifully written :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words, and best wishes.