Walking With Myself

Have changed the form ; prose poetry ( I have recently discovered) needs a prose form and not the typical poetic reduced enjambment. It now ( I hope ) reads better.

So get your boots on my old mate;past

the Pestkreuz and left of the river.

Can`t be that bad, can it ?

Two horses;twelve birds.

The be-alone of Winter among

all these unfinished trees.

And I`m sorry; you will be benched

among the black leaves.Nothing changes 

when you get home: you have

failed to lose the weight

of the passed river.

Author's Note

I notice that much modern poetry has reduced imagery; it evokes emotions through
situations. I doubt if this is much of a good example, but I have the feeling I want to try
and write some poems in this way.
(c)Leslie Philibert for the World. All rights reserved.

Reviews

[Emily B]

when i think that the vehicle you are driving is not your first language, or probably even your second, i am much impressed at the ease with which you paint a picture

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this...in a way. the lack of imagery reflects the feeling of lonliness and being somehow incomplete...

leaves us a lot to imagine...

sometimes we put so much imagery in poems that there is nothing to think about...what you see is what you get...and thinking becomes a minimum task.

[FrancescaX]

I have only a question: What prompted you to write this piece?

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the review. I went for a walk, feeling bad.
And I had just read some poetry in the Guardian and wanted to write something that evokes emotion from a sparse, matter-of-fact style that contains little imagery, just one or two images.For some reason this is the kind of work that gets placed in good magazines. Does this poem work ? maybe, but I want to write some work where the situation not the language is important. That`s why I changed the form so it is ( something ) like a paragraph of a story. I`m not too sure if you wanted to know
all this, but that is how this happened, and ...a very good question indeed !

[FrancescaX]

Well...honestly speaking, I don't believe this is your natural style. Plus, i don't like some of the materials published in magazines...they remind me of dry, stale bread as people are trying to sound "deep" and "philosophical". Like my friends in novels would say, balderdash! Thank you for taking the time to explain...and sometimes, it's the language that helps bring out the situation. Check out my poem..Just Read It. Then tell me what you think.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for your comments, I like reviews that are honest, they help me the most. You are probablyread moreThanks for your comments, I like reviews that are honest, they help me the most. You are probably
right, my biggest weaknes as a poet is that I tend to be influenced a lot by what I read. It is not easy
to find your own voice and at the same time try new directions. But on the other hand I don`t want
to endlessly repeat myself. My own exegesis says of this ; OK, some good ideas, probably not that
brillant, but some elements I might use in the future. Best wishes, Leslie !

[Frieda P]

A philosophical piece from your pen Leslie, I quite enjoyed your pensive walkabout.

[Tina Kline]

Fantastic job on this. Love the imagery in this very feeling/thinking poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Dearest Leslie, you can turn your hand to any poetic style. This style suits your wit and intellect. The poem is so well balanced and it feels a little like a man on a laboured country walk, walking past the fallen from plague and wondering.

[Leslie Philibert]

Dear John, I notice in the poetry sides of the Guardian that a lot of poems are like this. A style for
me ? Not sure, but it seems to be read a lot these days. Thanks very much for the kind words.

[Lyn Anderson]

Style great - a thinking poem - complex, but simple, a great read.

[Leslie Philibert]

Thanks for the kind words. Not too sure If I want to write like this, but this kind of work is being
published a lot, so I`ll have a go.

[Lyn Anderson]

Well, an amazing go it is.

[Jeremy Baker]

I like this prose style; it's conversational and easy to read. That in itself is quite disarming as the poem is quite philosophical and serious. The techniques you weave throughout it reveal a masterful command of language - no surprises there! - and the oblique imagery dances around in my head long after reading. Very impressive work, Leslie :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Hallo Jeremy,
thanks for the kind words. I notice that many of poems feature in the Guardian are like this.
Not too sure if I want to write like this, but it seems to be very popular.
Thanks once again. !