House

about the past

strong breezes in a familiar house

corridors full of leaves

torn curtains across broken windows

mirror face.

your back turned into a bow;

suffer the same loop

the same head brick,

the same safe of dirty secrets;

explore the same labyrinth

from which you want to escape;

a script not to be ripped up,

the pushing away and holding.

Reviews

[V]

Modern writing, I like how you built up the stanzas. The lines contain strong words. Simplicity with a deep impact whilst reading.

[Onku Ghosh]

Very interesting read on the past which you probably don't want to remember You have portrayed the house with its "corridoors full of leaves/torn curtains across broken windows."so well that I can see it in my mind's eyes.Wonderful use of imagery.Great write!!

[Lethu]

a short piece to draw a lot of pictures in one's mind. There goes the saying "dynamite comes in small sizes" lol...good writing Sir..

[Coyote Song]

A very haunting poem. Time eats away at everything...structures, memories and life. When memories are gone so is the past. Events, lives, all things. It is good to write things down. It keeps the past alive. I like the imagery you use in this and really enjoyed your most wonderful poem!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like old houses. They seem to hold secrets of life. I enjoyed your description in the poem. Memories make a building have reason and purpose. I wanted to read more. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Jack Cassidy]

This is my new favorite from you. I can appreciate your web of artistry here, nice one.

[rhythm&blues]

This one is a bit haunting, had to read through it a few times, very interesting choices to portray those feelings.

[Keith]

It is though you have articulated the feeling of deja-vu. A familiar place that conjures up uneasy memories of the past. Great work, so few words say so much, yet it leaves us wondering......

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Great poem, what I really love in your works it is short but resonates volumes. I always enjoy it. Thanks for sharing.

[Tina Kline]

I think this is a very compelling poem. Our lives haunt us. They can give us comfort but we still yearn for something new and time steals hopes away. This is a poem of strong emotions too. At least for me it sure was. Very well written poem. I enjoyed this a lot.