Another Rainy Night I Suffer

a lot of rain here...

Sunk in the sodden wetlands

we wade through pools of glass

wet smoke and begging loam,

a sudden rain,warm as a child`s palm

as young fish we tumble in running brooks,

seas in our eyes, the flood

pulls us darkly under the moon

the rain a s**t at every corner;

dark as the night is water.

Reviews

[L.Edward]

Great one! You have a prarticular knack for weaving dark allure.

[Renny]

Nice imagery of nature, good write!

[Arabdha]

lovely descriptions,imagery and metaphors !

[Pax]

a perfect poetic description of what you see under the rain...
well done!

[Cool Handless Luke]

That's an excellent work Leslie. Something about it just reaches out to me. The imagery is well done and the last three lines are classic stuff!

[quinfinn]

having a spot of rainy weather and feeling a bit like a fish? reminds me of my years in England. excellent write here. Leslie, makes me think of many moist and reluctant memories. you have mad writing skills.

[Tree]

Incredibly dark, and beautifully vivid. All three stanza's stand on their own, but he last one sits on a pedestal. As it should be.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A stunning poem by a talented poet...

what a gem of a poem!! :))

[Sheila Kline]

This is the first poem of yours I think I have reviewed (maybe one a while ago?), and I am indeed impressed. I like your use of metaphor as it gives the overall impact of the poem a big splash in the rain puddle!!
Your words, "warm as a child's palm" makes me think of my boys when they small and how they loved to get wet in the rain!!
Very nice Leslie!

[ChemicalMadness]

This was gorgeous. Warm as a child's palm....I cherish that descriptor. everything has already been said, I fear.....

CM